Gregory Singer<p>Is this a complete piece? Not too bad. I'd get to the point more quickly as to the central aim for the piece. Perhaps show more her real motivations for fighting. "Why is she doing this?" The pacing... more<p>Is this a complete piece? Not too bad. I'd get to the point more quickly as to the central aim for the piece. Perhaps show more her real motivations for fighting. "Why is she doing this?" The pacing is alright, although it is about fighting, so you expect the action sequences to be cut a little faster. Also, there should be a centra "goal" for her to achieve. Right now it seems to be a profile piece and not a doc. Good job overall!</p> less
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